Tastes and Sounds (Haiku and Tanka)

Feverish hostess
serves chickpeas dropped on the floor—
a guest spills the beans.

*****

Sick party-goer
coughs and sneezes on buffet—
chilly reception.

*****

The corner bakeshop
seems a buttery temptress,
but smells can deceive.
Pastries seduce, disappoint—
buttery temptress no more.

*****

My first memory:
the sound and the vibration
of a freight train’s roar.
Budding logic says, “Can’t be.”
Sensed pre-birth within the womb?

*****

(My second haiku was inspired by Haiku Heights’ cold prompt. My first memory tanka was inspired by Free Write Fridays and Monday Memories.)

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13 Responses to “Tastes and Sounds (Haiku and Tanka)”

  1. Kellie says:

    this is awesome! sorry it has taken me so long to get back to you. for some reason your reply to FWF was in my spam folder :( so happy i found it! i love the form, style, nostalgia and reverie. brilliant penning.

  2. nimue says:

    Nice collection !! loved each one of them :)

  3. madkane says:

    Thanks Kellie and nimue!

  4. Teresa says:

    Great collection of poems. I must say that second one made me chuckle.

  5. Ramesh Sood says:

    I am absolutely dumbstuck.. this is beautifully written.. Happy to be here.. I liked the last one a lot… it tells a lot.. and then buffet.. it pushed me away from itself..

  6. Nanka says:

    That chilly reception made me smile and remember my Tummy Tango!! Luckily no one was spreading the virus there!! :)

  7. Leo says:

    oh my.. those party goers won’t be too pleased with the sick fella now, will they? :)

    Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason

  8. JTS says:

    Wonderful poems, some made me smile :-) We know that babies do respond to sound… voices, music, vibration… in the womb, so to me it is entirely plausible that you have a memory of a train. I wonder at what age/point in your life you connected the memory with the actual imagery of a train. Thank you for sharing this Tanka on Monday Memories!

  9. madkane says:

    Thanks so much to all of you for your lovely comments and kind words.

    And JTS, here’s the answer to your question regarding my train memory. When I was six or so my family moved to a house seven blocks from a railroad station. You couldn’t hear the trains by day. But at night I could hear the train go by once an hour from my bedroom. Hearing that train brought back my prior memory of a much closer train going by.

  10. Lisa says:

    As always I LOVE your writing. As to your train memory, we all know that as humans we only use a small portion of our brain. I believe it is distinctly possible you have recollections from the womb – most just don’t try to tap into that portion of their brain.

  11. nimue says:

    Back again to same post and i enjoyed it the same as before :D

  12. Amanda Moore says:

    Gosh Mad now I am hungry! loved them all your “cold” Haiku for HH was very witty!

  13. madkane says:

    Thanks so much Lisa, Nimue, and Amanda!